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Postby lapinsjolis » Fri Jan 16, 2004 4:46 am

I remember that once I mattered
I am lost, my meaning scattered

An outline of what I used to be
A study of an exquisite misery

Half erased so hard to detect
No one would even care to
suspect

Fading in a shadowed existence alone
Nothing to cling to, nowhere is home

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I am underneath you burning white
Wash away the darkness with your light

I am but a breath, a thought, a song
You are the eternal I want to belong

A movement in my soul, a passion no one can guess
Wrapped around you in this bliss it's easy to confess

The ecstatic thrill that only you contain
I have heard it called by another name

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"Be yourself; everyone else is already taken."

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Postby Mr. Misery » Fri Jan 16, 2004 5:17 am

An Inferno with a lost soul and a Paradise of physical love expressed with intimations of immortality. I like the way you have presented these poems back to back and in counterpoint, despair and delight.

My favorite couplet from each:

Fading in a shadowed existence alone
Nothing to cling to, nowhere is home.


And:

I am but a breath, a thought, a song
You are the eternal I want to belong.


That last line is especially powerful. Two remarkably beautiful poems.

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Postby lapinsjolis » Fri Jan 16, 2004 5:23 am

Praise from a remarkable mind such as yours is accepted with pride. Thank you for reading them.
"Be yourself; everyone else is already taken."

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Postby lapinsjolis » Wed Jan 21, 2004 2:11 am

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Breathless, I move yet am still
Beyond emotion or what I will

A wordless soliloquy written in a better language than
is known
The tongue can remain silent because the soul is
already shown

Above this world a breeze carries me
A view of something that has to be
You precede my memory

There is no beginning to be penned
No trepidation there is no end

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Shattered by this desolation waiting and longing
Madness has it's destination a place of belonging

Could death be more painful than this?
Tormented and haunted by all that I miss

Let me live in the past tense and in your presence
Your hands speak in a tongue that awake every sense

Come touch me, move me, take me
I'm too much yours to be free
"Be yourself; everyone else is already taken."

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Postby Mr. Misery » Wed Jan 21, 2004 3:07 am

Two new love poems different and yet of a piece, entwined with themes of the temporal and the eternal running through each.

The first deals with the transcendent and inexpressibly beautiful aspects of love--beyond breath, emotion, the will, language, the body, chance, memory and time:

A wordless soliloquy written in a better language than
is known
The tongue can remain silent because the soul is
already shown


The second treats the earthly anguish of being apart from the loved one, and the longing to be together again. Desolation, madness, death, pain, and torment are evoked to express the suffering. Yet the beauty of belonging to another on the temporal and eternal plane inspires a tremendous affirmation:

Come touch me, move me, take me
I'm too much yours to be free.


LJ, it's evident that these poems come straight from the heart with you. You and they are wonderful.

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Postby lapinsjolis » Wed Jan 21, 2004 3:11 am

You're the wonderful one! You take such time and care reading everything. You are remarkable, well-read and a very fine writer.
Your presence, limited as it is, always makes the board a pleasure to come to. I'm both humbled and honored at the attention you've given my poems. Merci Mr. Misery! My constant and champion. 8) :wink:
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